1) I like the premise very much. But tackling the birth of the Chorus AND Prometheus AND Pandora in two short acts seems like a lot (though I admit, I may be missing a thread here that binds them tight enough thematically to make them work). Chorus and Prometheus alone works for me because then the theme of creation and engaging with the world is more clear for a short play.
(Admittedly, not a very helpful observation for a play named 'Pandora.' Sorry about that.)
2) Some great lines here. I especially like, "You can’t protect an idea. You can only be protected from them," but there are others I could pick out as well. In particular, "You can't diminish it by taking from it. You can only spread it around," is intriguing. I suspect there are deeper ideas buried in that statement that you could unpack some more.
3) The speech of Epimethus, Prometheus and Pandora feels a little too casual for me. Perhaps this was an attempt to make them seem timeless(?), which I would totally agree with. But just a touch more formality in their speech might help get across the gravity of what it is they're doing--creating the world as we know it. And in Prometheus' case, risking the most grievous of punishments for the sake of the survival of his charges.
4) PLEASE DON'T TAKE ANY OF THE ABOVE AS HARSH. I liked this a lot. I'm just trying to offer what I hope is constructive feedback. =)
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Date: 2007-09-23 03:49 am (UTC)1) I like the premise very much. But tackling the birth of the Chorus AND Prometheus AND Pandora in two short acts seems like a lot (though I admit, I may be missing a thread here that binds them tight enough thematically to make them work). Chorus and Prometheus alone works for me because then the theme of creation and engaging with the world is more clear for a short play.
(Admittedly, not a very helpful observation for a play named 'Pandora.' Sorry about that.)
2) Some great lines here. I especially like, "You can’t protect an idea. You can only be protected from them," but there are others I could pick out as well. In particular, "You can't diminish it by taking from it. You can only spread it around," is intriguing. I suspect there are deeper ideas buried in that statement that you could unpack some more.
3) The speech of Epimethus, Prometheus and Pandora feels a little too casual for me. Perhaps this was an attempt to make them seem timeless(?), which I would totally agree with. But just a touch more formality in their speech might help get across the gravity of what it is they're doing--creating the world as we know it. And in Prometheus' case, risking the most grievous of punishments for the sake of the survival of his charges.
4) PLEASE DON'T TAKE ANY OF THE ABOVE AS HARSH. I liked this a lot. I'm just trying to offer what I hope is constructive feedback. =)